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Literature Review 182 Introduction 56 Proposal 53

Figure 7: Introduction Genre Convention Revision

Research Focus. In Study One, I found that the most frequent commentary for the genre

conventions of the Introduction was Research Focus (38%). Study Two findings show Research Focus revisions were the most frequent genre convention revisions (41%). Thus, the frequencies of Research Focus commentary and the frequencies of Research Focus revisions match, suggesting that there is a relationship between the focus of my commentary and students’ response in their revisions. In these Research Focus revisions, students revised with Substitution 7 times, Addition 7 times, No Change 7 times, and Deletion 2 times.

Excerpt A provides an example of Substitution for the development of a clearer Research Focus.

Excerpt A.

Comment: I would replace this statement and create a very clear Research Focus where

you tell us what your Research Focus is, why this research is important, and how you’ll examine this research in the research Proposal paper.

Revision: Good leadership skills are crucial to run a company. The employer satisfaction

depends on leadership skills. Women are now seen as a valuable asset in leadership because of their leadership qualities. Previous research looked into how different leadership qualities can affect the employers and the job retention. This current will also look at this topic but also what these qualities can bring to a company. Also, this research will look into how females and males respond to either a male or female in leadership. Excerpt B provides an example of Addition for the development of a clearer Research Focus.

Excerpt B.

Original: The two that I have chosen to talk about is lawyers and soldiers.

Comment: Remember that I need to have a clear reason as to why this research is

necessary to research. So make sure to add the WHY for your Research Focus.

Revision: The two that I have chosen to talk about is lawyers and soldiers. I have chosen

the military and lawyers because I feel that the integration of technology in the form of robotic intelligence will affect these areas the most. Also, lawyers and the military are two popular professions and therefore important to investigate.

Analysis of No Change revisions suggest that students did not respond to all comments requesting revision for a clear Research Focus.

Excerpt C provides an example of No Change of the Research Focus.

Excerpt C.

Original: Usually people buy stock when they retire, this is a way they receive some

it. They do not get much of a profit from this as selling the stock. And they might lose a lot of money.

Comment: So here I do not see a clear Research Focus. Remember that the Research

Focus tells us WHAT the research will examine, WHY the research will examine that particular research, and HOW the research will be focused for the study.

Revision: Usually people buy stock when they retire, this is a way they receive some

money while not working. People do not usually know what stock to buy or how to sell it. They do not get much of a profit from this as selling the stock. And they might lose a lot of money.

Research Gap. In Study One, I found that the second most frequent commentary for the genre

conventions of the Introduction was Research Gap (23%). Study Two findings show Research Focus revisions were the second most frequent genre convention revisions (23%). Thus, the frequencies of Research Gap commentary and the frequencies of Research Gap revisions match, again suggesting that there is a relationship between the focus of my commentary and students’ response in their revisions. In these Research Gap revisions, students revised with No Change 7 times, Addition 3 times, Substitution 2 times, and Deletion once. The high frequency of No Change finding suggest that students were continuing to find an entry point in their Literature Reviews where they presented a clear and focused Research Gap for exploration.

Excerpt A provides an example of No Change revision for the development of a clearer Research Gap in the Introduction.

Original: The abuse of enhancement drugs in academia can and are affecting and

influencing students of all levels. It is becoming increasingly popular for those who want to get ahead in the competition of grades/marks.

Comment: Why will this be studied?

Revision: The abuse of enhancement drugs in academia can and are affecting and

influencing students of all levels. It is becoming increasingly popular for those who want to get ahead in the competition of grades/marks.

Excerpt B provides an example of Addition for the development of a clearer Research Gap in the Introduction.

Excerpt B.

Original: The film industry is using digital film techniques and they should be

investigated further.

Comment: Here you want to add a clear Research Gap by stating “My research will

examine X in order to expand/question/further analyze/etc. Y because Z is missing.

Revision: My Research Gap will look at the controversial transition from film to digital

video as the dominant format to shoot movies in. The film industry is using digital film techniques and they should be investigated further. I will use The Wolf of Wall Street as for Analysis of a film that highlights how digital and traditional formats can complement one another if used properly.

Literature review genre convention revisions. In Step Three of Project Three, assignment and

instructor feedback focus was on the Literature Review, so most of the revisions students made in draft four reflect this focus. For reference, the Genre Conventions of Literature Review are in Table 3 (Analysis, Synthesis, Multiple Sources, and Organization). Figure 8 presents the overall

distribution of Literature Review Convention revisions (n=153): Analysis (n=65, 36%), Synthesis (n=44, 24%), Multiple Sources (n=37, 20%) and Organization (n=36, 20%).

Figure 8: Literature Review Genre Convention Revision Frequencies

Analysis. In Study One, I found that the most frequent commentary for the genre conventions of

the Literature Review was Analysis (37%). Study Two findings show Analysis revisions were the most frequent genre convention revisions (36%). Thus, the frequencies of Analysis commentary and the frequencies of Analysis revisions match, suggesting that there is a relationship between the focus of my commentary and students’ response in their revisions. In these Analysis revisions, students revised with Substitution 30 times (46%), Addition 24 times (37%), Deletion 6 times (9%) and No Change 5 times (8%).

Excerpt A provides an example of Substitution for the development of Analysis in the Literature Review. Excerpt A. 35% 17% 24% 24%

Literature Review Convention Revisions: